Okay, I know this is off-subject, but I need opinions. This is from my book, "The Chosen Ones". PLEASE tell me what you think. I can't decide to put symbolism, or have God directly mentioned in it. Any suggestions?
The familiar darkness washed over me. I despaired, as did my thoughts. Throbbing…my arm…ow! Where am I? I was afraid, and my arm hurt terribly. Seconds later my pain and fear evaporated as a blinding light eradicated the darkness. Then, a great Presence seemed to approach. Peace came over my entire body, and I relaxed. Then, the Presence, which to me seemed much like an angel, spoke.
“Elwyn of Naibara, fear not, for I am with you. Do not be dismayed, Elwyn, for I am your God. I will strengthen you and help you; I will uphold you with my righteous right hand.”
And then the vision faded. I came to...
The idea is that she just blacked out in this little cave, and then she has this vision and wakes up in a different world. It is confusing, but I like it. Her name is Elwyn (Ellie).
-Ellie
Monday, January 14, 2008
Hmmm...
Posted by Shelby at 3:29 PM
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Hmm... well... I'll think about it... maybe you could talk about God kinda like you did it that part and then reveal it more so as the book goes on. I don't know though...
I don't know but whatever you chose will be great. I personally am better at directly stating it. It is easier than finding symbolisms.
Yep, I agree... Whatever you chose will be great. I like the symbolism idea though... it makes it interesting.
I think I'm am gonna do symbolism
I am a lot better at directly stating it, but then again, I have never tried my hand at symbolism, so I might just be good at it.
Cool!
Yeah!
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